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Health care is a very major issue that deals with the future of the U.S and its citizens. President Obama wants to make the insurance more available to all people and change the American’s health care system so that it is cheaper. He also wants the change so that the insurance companies find it harder to get out of paying for treatment. There are many pros of enforcing health care such as it will come to the aid of people who do not have Medicare or Medicaid. Many people have went to hospitals for serious conditions and have either been sent back out of the hospital or tended to last because they cannot afford to pay the bill. If this is enforced, the costs of the health bills will be reduced and more affordable. People will not have to pay a large amount of money just because of natural causes. On the other hand, patients receiving medical coverage also receive additional help in the event of a serious injury or illness. It would also assist people who have a very low income but yet work hard acquire the help they require. For instance, perhaps right now they are stress out about not being able to afford prescription drugs or frustrated that they cannot afford to pay a dentist or to operate on their teeth. It would provide relief to families fighting to make ends meet. People would also be protected in the event of an accident. Additional pro is that there will be increased competition in the insurance market. It might be from a public option. It might also be from some kind of non-profit, state-specific, co-operative. This might push the health care companies to lower costs and provide better services. Health care enforcement not only has pros but it also has some cons. There will be fewer doctors in medicine because of a drastic pay cut. Patients may be subjected to wait extremely long for treatment. If health care does happen to get enforced, hospitals will be packed with patients that need to be treated. Another con of health care enforcement is that people will be controlled more by the government. If health care does get enforced then it is more than likely that the government is going to take charge and make huge changes. He may pass additional restrictions to keep us away from certain things or increase taxes on things such as smoking, fast-food, etc. Doing these things could actually stop many Americans from having the freedom that they already have. All of our health records and personal information will be in the hands of the government and all of that information will no longer be confidential. Moreover, government-controlled health care could lead to a decrease in patient flexibility. The doctors cannot get to all of the patients at one time and they have to figure out which people will have to be treated first. These decisions could lead to people with serious problems waiting for many months just to get treatment at the hospitals. Should Congress pass a health care reform bill? I think it is important that they do everything within their power to get the middle class back to full employment before they try to overhaul the health care system. No matter what reforms are made, it is going to add a huge burden to government budgets. The U.S cannot maintain the current rate of spending, much less increase it, without a solid middle class tax base because we can be certain that the rich and business are not going to pay for it.

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